Tay Pei Shan ( SHOW NOT TELL)

He pushed his way through the crowd.

It was the peak hour and everyone was packed like sardines in the train. John was feeling rather uncomfortable and he was sweating profusely.
 "Next stop, City Hall Interchange" The speaker announced.
 "Oh no! I'm alighting at the next stop and I'm all squashed up here" He thought to himself.
 After a while, the train arrived at his destination. He took a deep breath, and pushed his way through the crowd, saying "excuse me" all the way out. 
"Phew! I'm finally out!" He exclaimed as he walked towards the escalator.

1 Response to "Tay Pei Shan ( SHOW NOT TELL)"

  1. lis Says:

    Good showing of a commuter's grievance, through the use of speeches. Keep it up! Remember to paragraph your speech accordingly.

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